Reflection

1. Read at least two other students' Icons projects. Then, cite and explain one specific example of extremely high quality work. Link to this, copy and paste the text, show the image... whatever is necessary to show this great work. Then, explain what makes it so great.

The miniature looking guitar was long, dark brown, chubby at the bottom, black nylon strings, and cheep tuners. It was exactly what I was looking for. Well not exactly cheep tuners but I can live with it. -Jasmine Campos

It was really decriptive and made you visualize what was going on. So instead of just putting it the miniature guitar was a ukulele she described it and made it detailed.

2. Explain what aspect of yours is the most outstanding. why does this aspect stand out to you?

I sat in the living room with my mom, dad, and sister I put the DVR to play House. In this episode Dr. House and his team are thinking of a diagnosis of a man with a giant swollen tongue. –Marcos Ramirez

It takes the reader in and puts a setting. The reader will now know where I am and will have an easier time to imagine it.

3. If you had one more draft or one more day to work, what would you do? Why?

I would add more details, because I think I could still improve in someplaces to get the reader more involved and not be guessing.

4. State the importance of the Icons project in one sentence!

To find your place in a world of icons and know what you can accomplish.

Book Review

1. Read at least two other students' Book Reviews. Then, cite and explain one specific example of extremely high quality work. Link to this or copy and paste the text... whatever is necessary to show this great work. Then, explain what makes it so great.

The Things They Carried" was a very fabulous book, but might be very confusing. –Jared

It starts off being honest with his opinion and shows the reader what he thinks about it. If they didn't want a confusing book they would now choose another one.

2. Explain what aspect of your book review is the most outstanding. why does this aspect stand out to you?

Piggy is a short kid with asthma, has glasses, and always talks about his aunt back home. –Marcos Ramirez

I describe the characters so the readers know what im talking about and wont be like; Who's piggy?

3. If you had one more draft or one more day to work, what would you do? Why?

I would of added more details about the book and explained the plot more in detail. That way the reader will have a better understanding on my opinion of the book and why I thought like that

4. State the importance of the Icons project in one sentence!

The importance of the book review was to share out our knowledge of the book to the world and to slowly improve in it.

In General...

1. What did you discover about your writing during summer school?

I dicovered I can add a lot of details to get the reader involved and use to many –ing verbs which start to get boring really quickly which takes emotion of of my writing.

2. What goals do you have for your writing in the future?

Goals I have are to add way more details and hold back my -ing verbs and use the Writing Tips to improve my writing.

Please post this before 12:00 pm on August 13, 2010. Each question is worth up to three (3) points!

Writing Tips

Make Meeting Early
- Begin sentences with subjects and verbs

ex. Marcos played soccer.

(Subject:Marcos)
(Verb:Played)

Activate your Verbs

- Strong verbs create strong actions, save words, and reveal the players.
-The Subjects preforms the action of the verb.

ex. Bond climbed the few stairs and unlocked and locked and bolted the door. Moonlight filtered through the curtains walked, stripped, cleaned, went....

The Loop.

The loop has an intro, the middle relates with the intro, and an outro which is coming back to the intro. Not ending it with a conclusion like most 5 paragraphs essays do.

A good introduction has:

• Character(s)
• Character development
• details
• setting
• location
• date
• conflicts
• statistics
• Quote(s)
• Irony

The intro doesn't need to have all of them but at least some.

#6 Concerts not pancakes

Pancakes: Has a great begging, OK middle, and a bad ending.

Ex: We are what we search for

an unnecessary word is added to the end. (for)

Concerts: Has a Great beginning, OK middle, and great ending.

Ex: We are what we Search

These were copied from someone else's, since I wasn't here for them.

""Take it easy on the "ing's"

- prefer the simples past tense
- "ings" add syllables (makes writing longer)
- "ings" change sounds
- "ings" start to sound the same (repetitive)

ex. Anna went running, swimming and rollerskating last weekend when she went to San Diego.
(using ing's)

When Anna visited San Diego last weekend, she ran, swam, and roller skated.
(taking it easy in ing's)

Watch those adverbs

-Use adverbs to change the meaning of the verb.

ex. The girl happily smiled ( In this sentence, the writer is not watching the adverbs beacuse the adverb happily is descriving the smile, and usually people smile when they are happy).

The girl slowly blinlked. ( In this sentence, the adverb slowly is used correctly beacue people usually blink in a very fast phase changing the meaning of the verb).""

Doctors 8/9/10

I sat in the living room with my mom, dad, and sister I put the DVR to play House. In this episode Dr. House and his team are thinking of a diagnosis of a man with a giant swollen tongue. The husband of an old patient goes into his office and shoots him. House still treats the patient from the hospital bed. The shooter was next to him, who was shot by security and hand-cuffed, him to his bed. When he wakes up and starts hallucinating periodically he starts doubting if he can diagnose. As his patient's gets worse, he finds out he is hallucinating and tries to trick his brain to get out of it. He said “As long as the delusion made sense my mind lets it go on. I have to make it not make sense. I have to push it past the point where I can trick my mind.” He then argues some more and uses the machine that is used for precision surgery and cuts through the patient to show all the blood come out and his intestine out and covered in blood. My mom turns around, while my dad is looking at the screen all weird and my sis yells, “EWWWW!” Well me I just sit there wondering what got hurt inside. Looking at House’s thought process what he was thinking when he did that. How he knew everything that was going on. How he was so confident.That was just admirable I love doctors. Diagnostics is my favorite part of being a doctor. I want to be a doctor because they don’t only help people they also have “mysteries” they have to solve. Mysteries aren’t only in medicine. There’s also solve mysteries in technology, math, and all kinds of things. For example; why does the computer not turn on or in math what equation do I have to use. Mysteries are fun because they usually follow a category. Medicine only deals with medical things, mathematical things only deal with equations, and computer problems only deal with hardware or software. So it’s not hard to solve them if you know the content. Dr. House (Gregory House) is a character in the show House. He is the head of the diagnostics team. He is a complete jerk and takes great risks but always gets the job done. As Donald says of Dr. House, “Because when you're that big a jerk, you're either great or unemployed,” that means he’s great because he has a job. After watching all the episodes you can tell he is recognized all over the world and treats exclusive patients with all kinds of diseases. He bounces off ideas from his team. I do a lot of that especially with my friend Cesar. He gets epiphany when he talks to another person which also happens to me a lot because when I have something to solve I’m always thinking about the possible solution. Everyone either hates him or respects him but no matter what the secret romance with the administrator and his easiness to solve cases no other doctor can makes him do anything he wants and never gets fired. I can’t get enough of it. I’m always watching the show over and over again to learn all the medical terms and memorize all the diagnostics. He inspires me to want to become part of a Diagnostics team and make a change somewhere in the world solving mysteries and saving lives. “Yes, I knew it!” I thought to myself. At the end of the show it resulted it was a hallucination, he being pushed to the emergency room after being shot. He passed out again. It resulted the whole show was a hallucination. That’s when my parents where a little disappointed, I was fully engaged wondering what the patient really had and what was going to happen next.

Resources:

“No Reason.” House. Fox. 23 May 2006

“Sex Kills.” House. Fox. Donald. 7 March 2006

1. On a macro level (i.e., the big picture), specifically how have you revised your Artist's Statement? Why? Use specific examples from your first and second drafts in your answer. · I made paper longer because it was only two paragraphs and I needed to add much more detail and some characters to it.

2. Cite three specific sentences from your three different parts of your revised artist statement that directly address different parts of the prompt. Identify/explain what they address & how they work in your overall statement. · “I was fully engaged wondering what the patient really had and what was going to happen next.” It shows that I was getting into the habit of wondering what was next and starting to solve things. · “He inspires me to want to become part of a Diagnostics team and make a change somewhere in the world solving mysteries and saving lives.” Here I’m saying that I’m going to be part a doctor and be an icon to someone else and making them want to be like me and save lives. · “He bounces off ideas from his team. I do a lot of that especially with my friend Cesar.” It showing how I’m also bouncing off ideas and I will be able to pass this down to my kids and friends when the time comes.

3. How have you revised your Image? What is better about it now? What are your next steps? · At first I was going to take a picture in front of a hospital, instead I decided to take a picture watching the show showing that I’m absorbing all the information that’s going on,

4. How have you revised your Resources? What is better about them now? What are your next steps? · In my first draft I didn’t have any resources I just talked about Dr. House but not about a show or had any examples, but now I have an example of a show and a quote from another show.